PvZ Extended Comic

This is going into my scraps as soon as I get a better picture or finish this for real.. I'm so sorry lol For my serial art class, I had to take one of my old comics and expand it by adding 20 new panels. Each panel is a small, separate piece of paper so we can add, remove, and rearrange panels to see how it affects the interpretation or storyline. I decided to add a little drama to my Plants vs. Zombies comic (: hellobeasty.deviantart.com/art… The brush pen was a really bad idea and killed about 80% of the detail in my sketches, but it was fun to use at least. I'm sorry it's hard to tell what's going on in some places.

I'd love some crit on this! Especially on the first 12 panels, I feel like many of them are "fillers" and I couldn't quite figure out how to arrange them for the best pacing/impact. This serial art stuff is harder than it looks, respect to the pros!